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| Teddy Bear |
And this is what happens when Write on Edge gives you a prompt: 500 words, a waitress, a lake, in the summer, with a secret. Boom!
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She sat on the bench kicking her bare legs playfully. The June sun warmed the curve of her neck as she read her book, occasionally glancing up at the birds skipping along the ripples of the lake. Her worn shoes lay abandoned a few feet away and her toes dug into the cool depths of the sand. As her fingers turned the last pages, she looked up again and sighed. She could smell the pine wafting up from the trees below, and mixing with the smell of the diner that had seeped into her hair and under her skin. She looked down at her stained pink uniform. Should she have told him?
She heard his voice in her head, and the words he said earlier that morning. I can’t do this. His tone had been gentle but there had been something else, a catch in his breath, almost hysterical; a new reserve holding him back. He had always been so open to her, but now… it was if all their memories were gone. This man who had become her lover, her friend, and her confidant… She had only wanted to try it. She was sure he would like it if he just tried it. But had she gone too far? Said too much?
Since she was 14 she had hidden this part of herself. But lately, she thought they had grown so close, close enough to maybe tell him... He had asked her, after all, hadn’t he? He said tell me what you want, what you really really want… Shyly, she had pulled an old Polaroid photograph from her purse and slid it across the table toward him. He stared at the photograph for a long time, and took his hand away, as if he didn’t want to touch it.
Is this a %^&*( joke? he cried, his eyes wide.
"Oh Teddy!" she whispered the nickname she'd given him, and reached for his hand. "You might like it!" she whimpered.
Don't call me that! he snarled and jerked his hand away.
He swore again and stood up to leave, dumping their breakfast onto her lap. She heard him mutter under his breath, sicko!
Is this a %^&*( joke? he cried, his eyes wide.
"Oh Teddy!" she whispered the nickname she'd given him, and reached for his hand. "You might like it!" she whimpered.
Don't call me that! he snarled and jerked his hand away.
He swore again and stood up to leave, dumping their breakfast onto her lap. She heard him mutter under his breath, sicko!
So now she sat on the bench, wondering about it all. She had really liked him. But for god’s sake, she wasn’t going to change who she was. She couldn’t! This terrible, beautiful secret had separated her from her friends all her life. But it was the only thing that made her happy. Smiling, she put her book down, unbuttoned her dirty dress and threw it into the wind. She ran down the short hill and straight into the cold, sparkling water that hit her like a slap in the face.
Her book, How to Live and Love Life as a Furry, lay on the bench awaiting her return.
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30 comments:
Jesus, did she ask him to wear a Wookie costume or something? What sort of man is this "Teddy"? Any man who won't dress in a fur suit doesn't deserve a piece of the action! LOL
Oh, shit, we were supposed to WRITE about those things? I got those same words and so I drowned the lady who served me waffles at IHOP. I could kick myself!
Very good. I did not see that coming.
oh boy!! scandalous! i love it. :)
Wow! I like that she was able to let go and stay true to herself. This was a wickedly delightful read.
HAHA! love it! I thought she was asking for butt sex, but the furry thing really surprised me! bravo
There truly aren't enough stories about Furries. ;-) But would he really have reacted that violently? I guess that I find that less believable says more about me than it does about your character, hahahahha. I really like how you held the suspense until the very end, and using the book to spill the beans was really creative.
Thanks CPeezy! Are you feeling better by the way?
You went to butt sex huh? Interesting?
Did you get accepted or what! :)
I want to read more stories from you!! Put your doll story on your blog haha you can add pictures
You gotta be yourself, right? Thanks!
I am sure plenty of people will volunteer to kick you, so no worries.
What did you drown her in? Syrup? Corn pops?
No one expects that.. ;)
Thank you!!
Oh indeed, how dare he! ;)
Oh ha ha!
Maybe it was their second date and she'd gotten attached too quickly or maybe he's just intolerant of furries... its for you to decide.
Thanks! I appreciate that. I was reading this wondering if after reading this story people are going to think that I myself am into furries...
And I am not! Or am I?
This made no sense to me, until I googled 'What is a furry'! lol
Was I feeling bad? I had a pelvic inflammation several weeks ago but that is all good now. And don't know yet if i got accepted...we will see. and I should do more blogging :/ hmm
Normally I would be scratching my head, going, "Huh?" However, since a friend of a friend was a furry, I have heard some interesting tales.
I had to admit, my imagination was running rampant on what could have disgusted the guy.
The first two paragraphs were my favorite, although I do not think the adverbs are needed in the first (it works well without them). Still, they are wonderful description and suck me into the story instantly.
I found the #*^ distracting instead of writing an actual curse word.
I love how she stayed true to herself.
Thanks for that feedback, I agree with everything! I curse a lot in my private life so I actually hate typing %^&* but I know curse words offend a lot of readers.
I agree with you about the adverbs too, taking them out, putting them back in! I love concrit thank you :)
I know no furries! You must write about the stories from your friend's point view!!
And now you know... and you can never not know now!! haha
I'm reminded of an episode of CSI where one Furry get's killed by another or something.
Definitely wasn't expecting that secret!
I know just the episode you mean. I was just explaining Furries to a coworker, you should have seen her jaw drop...
No, do curse if you mean to. Writing should not be bound to euphemisms, and your characters should be free to speak in their own voices.
We won't confuse them with you, nor will we treat it like blogging. This was good.
Well, that's a secret, isn't it? Poor thing. She just needs to find the right Liono and she'll be all set.
Love the take on the story elements. We shared a couple; it's amazing how different stories can be...
Man I was wide eyed and cringing as I read this wondering what the secret could possible be... eeek! Loved the shocking giggle I had when you revealed what it was and what a perfect nick-name! Of course, he would be a "Teddy Bear"...LOL!
That is very sweet thank you! I really appreciate you saying that and am glad you enjoyed it :)
Thanks Cameron! I'll run over and check yours out!
That and the Tea-Party, yes. I would love to see a Furry Tea-Party candidate, wouldn't you?
I'll take the Furries over the Tea Party, any day.
Figuratively speaking, I hope
In every way.
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